I brought my drug sniffing dog Odell, to the dance on friday, he didn’t find any drugs, but managed to sniff out two pieces of pizza and a bag of doritos. (6)
1. As a compound adjective (two words working together to describe a noun), “drug-sniffing” should be hyphenated.
2. “Odell” is an appositive, a noun or noun phrase modifying another noun. It can be either essential and have no commas or non-essential and be separated from the sentence by commas on both ends.
3. “Friday” is a proper noun and should be capitalized.
4. We cannot separate two independent clauses with a comma; we must use a period or semicolon.
5. There should be no comma between “drugs” and “but” separating the compound predicate “did find” and “managed.”
6.“Doritos” is a proper noun and should be capitalized.
A corrected version might read
I brought my drug-sniffing dog Odell to the dance on Friday; he didn’t find any drugs but managed to sniff out two pieces of pizza and a bag of Doritos.