Monthly Archives: September 2010

September 27-October 1

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Monday 9/27 Monday schedule

Class in Midkiff for book talk and borrowing

Check the Blackboard for new resources and assignments.

Haʻawina hoʻihoʻi:

• Using your annotation from “Spear Fisher,” complete the poetry analysis form (on Blackboard under assignments) – deadline Tues 9/28 for period 8; Wed 9/29 for period 7

•Be ready to discuss Spear Fisher

• Continue to work on extended metaphor draft and vocab tree in-, im- (also on blackboard in assignment folder)

Tuesday, B schedule 2-4-6-8

Hoʻomākaukau: bell ringer, makaʻala moment, just write/just read – people you meet at. .

Haʻawina: Spear fisher fishbowl: “wordless” discussion and debate, vocabulary for Whetu Moana, commenting on blogs

Hoʻomaʻamaʻa: work time

Haʻawina hoʻihoʻi: Annotate for next class “Comparatively Speaking” p. 40 Jacq Carter and “Between Steel Bars” p. 59 Sia Figiel (make sure to read their bios)

Extended metaphor draft needs to be printed out and brought to class on Monday, October 4

Vocab tree in-, im- needs to go into the assignment box on blackboard by 3:30 next class.

Wednesday 9/29 A schedule 1-5-7-3

same as Tuesday

Thursday B schedule 2-4-6-8

Hoʻomākaukau: bell ringer, just write/just read – people you meet at. .

Haʻawina: Discussion of 2 poems fishbowl venn diagram (3 voices)

Hoʻomaʻamaʻa: work time – poetry analysis on one of the three

Haʻawina hoʻihoʻi: Annotate for next class “Ode to Fort Street” p. 85 Imaikalani Kalahele and “Blood Quantum” p. 120 Naomi Losch (make sure to read their bios)

Extended metaphor poem due on Monday, 10/4 all period

Save the last word for the artist on your discussion poem(s) for Tuesday (10/12) period 7, or Thursday (10/14) period 8.

Next SSR day and reading goals collection: Monday, 10/4

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Maka’ala Moments #7

Since the girls from Kamehameha are so much more hotter then the mainland, Kimo decided to skip Harvard, and raise mongooses behind Akahi instead. (6)

1. “Since” connotes time passing; “Because” relates to cause and effect.

2. If possible, keep the verb tense consistent. s

3. “more hotter” is redundant; “hotter” is the proper comparative.

4. The adverb “then” should be the conjunction “than.”

5. We have a parallel structure problem; we can’t compare Kamehameha girls to the mainland.

6. No comma is required in a compound infinitive.

Makaʻala Moments #6

Pua thought that between Kaipo forgetting they’re anniversary or kissing other girls, the forgetting is worst, she really liked roses. (6)

1. Modifying the gerund “forgetting,” “Kaipo” should be the possessive “Kaipo’s.”

2. “they’re” should be the possessive “their.”

3. The correlative conjunction should be “between. . . and. . . .”

4. The superlative “worst” should be the comparative “worse” because we’re comparing only two events.

5. We have a verb tense issue; make the entire sentence past or present tense.

6. The sentence is a run-on, sometimes referred to as a comma splice. Change the comma to a semi-colon, add a conjunction, or start a new sentence.

A corrected version might read

Pua thought that between Kaipo’s forgetting their anniversary and kissing other girls, the forgetting was worse; she really liked roses.

September 20 – 24, 2010

We’re journeying to the blogosphere this week – hold on tight, it’s going to be a bumpy ride!

Monday, September 20, Monday schedule 1-8

Hoʻomākaukau – SSR and/or Re-take of the Hōkūleʻa vocabulary quiz

Haʻawi mai – the blog immersion form should already be turned into  the digital drop box on blackboard. Anything after 3:30 pm today is considered late and points will be deducted.

Haʻawina – blogging 101 – format, tagging, protocol, enticing readers; extended metaphor poem stanza 1

Haʻawina hoʻihoʻi

  1. write/finish stanza 1,
  2. work on vocab. tree co- due on the last day of the week that you have English,
  3. Hōkūleʻa final in digital drop box in blackboard by 3:30 pm on Friday, 9/24
  4. draft plus conference sheet turned in to me on the last day of the week

Tuesday, 9/21 D schedule 8-6-4-2

Hoʻomākaukau: bell ringer, makaʻala moment, just read/just write/just share – sacred places, author’s chair

Haʻawina: Blogging 102 – comments and follows; stanza 2, common errors on essay drafts and how to fix them

Haʻawina hoʻihoʻi:

  1. Write/finish stanza 2
  2. continue working on your vocab tree (can be turned in early)
  3. work on your final essay

Wednesday – same as Tuesday

Thursday, 9/23 D day 8-6-4-2

Hoʻomākaukau: bell ringer, just read/just write/just share – sacred places “Chinatown,” “I Come from a Place” mini author’s chairs

Housekeeping: grade sheets, writing portfolios

Haʻawina: where to find assistance for extended metaphor poem; welcome to the blog site – how to get in, how to start;

Poetry unit part II: poems from Whetu Moana: Contemporary Polynesian Poems in English – Joe Balaz “Spear Fisher” annotate, discuss.

Haʻawina hoʻihoʻi: annotate “Spearfisher”, finish extended metaphor poem

Monday: meet at Midkiff, turn in draft of essay plus conference sheet.

September 13-17, 2010

Monday, September 13 B day 2-4-6-8

Hoʻomākaukau: bell ringer, Makaʻala moment, just read/just write/just share – people in your neighborhood – author’s chair, vocab. tree (on edmodo)

Haʻawina: guided writing group (plans are up in the air depending on what the drafts look like); start extended metaphor poems (again, depends), typing Hawaiian 101.

Haʻawina hoʻihoʻi: Heluhelu – next reading log check on Wednesday (the two weeks should equal 200 minutes), bring SSR book on Wednesday; vocab. tree due on the last day of the week to edmodo; stay -tuned during class on status of Hokuleʻa drafts

Tuesday 9/14 A day 1-5-7-3

Hoʻomākaukau: bell ringer, Makaʻala moment, just read/just write/just share -sacred places – author’s chair, vocab. tree (on edmodo)

Haʻawina: guided writing group (plans are up in the air depending on what the drafts look like); start extended metaphor poems (again, depends)

Haʻawina hoʻihoʻi: Heluhelu – next reading log check on Wednesday (the two weeks should equal 200 minutes), bring SSR book on Wednesday; vocab. tree due on the last day of the week to edmodo; stay -tuned during class on status of Hokuleʻa drafts

Wednesday early release – all periods, 30 minutes

Hoʻomākaukau: SSR, bell ringer

Haʻawina: extended metaphor poem format – 3 stanzas – dream/hook, mandala symbol, name – poetry elements work

Haʻawina hoʻihoʻi: heluhelu (next SSR day on Monday, 9/20), Hokulea draft update (stay tuned), stanza 1 due for next class

Thursday, 9/16 B day 2-4-6-8

Hoʻomākaukau: bell ringer,  just read/just write/just share – sacred places- author’s chair, vocab. tree (should be turned in on edmodo; online deadline of 3:30 pm)

Haʻawina: extended metaphor poems stanza 2 & 3 (again, depends), editing conferences

Haʻawina hoʻihoʻi: heluhelu (next SSR, reading log check day on Monday 9/20) – stay -tuned during class on status of Hokuleʻa drafts, extended metaphor poem draft – bring in for next class

Friday 9/17 C day 3-7-5-1

Hoʻomākaukau: bell ringer,  just read/just write/just share – things that make you laugh- author’s chair, vocab. tree (should be turned in on edmodo; online deadline of 3:30 pm)

Haʻawina: extended metaphor poems stanza 2 & 3 (again, depends), editing conferences

Haʻawina hoʻihoʻi: heluhelu (next SSR, reading log check day on Monday 9/20) – stay -tuned during class on status of Hokuleʻa drafts, extended metaphor poem draft – bring in for next class.

Makaʻala Moment #5

Ambrosia means food of the Gods but muffins, if our sales last week is any indication, tastes well enough for Kamehameha Students. (8)

1. Since “Ambrosia” is being defined, we should underline or italicize it.

2. We place the definition in quotation marks.

3. When one discusses many gods, the word “Gods” becomes a common noun, with a lower case “g.”

4. We need a comma after “gods” to separate the two independent clauses.

5. The plural subject “muffins” takes a plural predicate “taste.”

6. The plural subject “sales” takes a plural predicate “are.”

7. The predicate adjective “good” should replace the adverb “well.”

8. “Students” is a common noun, with a lower case “s.”

A corrected version might read

Ambrosia means “food of the gods,” but muffins, if our sales last week are any indication, taste good enough for Kamehameha students.

Agenda Week 5 Sept. 7-10, 2010

Monday – Labor Day holiday – i lā maikaʻi!

Tuesday, Sept. 7, 2010 C schedule 3-7-5-1

In class:

Hoʻomākaukau: Makaʻala moment 4, vocab. tree (key word = subway; sub- = under), bell ringer, just read/just write/just share, “Choosing My Name” “My Name” author’s chair

Haʻawina: go over “Hōkuleʻa” reaction paper, wrap up discussion (Hōkuleʻa draft 1 due on edmodo by Sunday, 9/12)

Hoʻomaʻamaʻa: extended metaphor work; voicethread work

Haʻawina hoʻihoʻi: heluhelu kākou (next SSR day Friday 9/10), vocab tree (due on Friday 9/10), mandala due next class

Wednesday 9/8 D schedule 8-6-4-2

see Tuesday

Thursday 9/9 A schedule 1-5-7-3

Hoʻomākaukau: bell ringer, just read/just write/just share author’s chair

Haʻawina: Hokuleʻa background info.

Hoʻomaʻamaʻa: mandala, voicethread, animoto

Haʻawina hoʻihoʻi: SSR Friday, bring reading log for checking, vocab. tree, mandala poem stanza 1 (connected to hooks)

Friday: PM schedule (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8)

Hoʻomākaukau: SSR, bell ringer – vocab. tree due, SSR check

Hoʻomaʻamaʻa: work day

Haʻawina hoʻihoʻi: Hōkūleʻa 1st draft in to Edmodo by next class

Makaʻala Moment 4

Although Mrs. Mauna liked her two son-in-laws equally good she favored the one who didn’t run his truck into the pedestrian overpass, and backed up traffic for twelve hours. (5)

1. The plural of “son-in-law” is “sons-in-law.”

2. The adjective “good” should be the adverb “well.”

3. We need a comma after the introductory adverb clause.

4. We don’t require a comma for the compound predicate “didn’t run” and “(didn’t) back up.”

5. “backed up” should be “back up,” following the shared helping verb “didn’t.

A corrected version might read

Although Mrs. Mauna liked her two sons-in-law equally well, she favored the one who didn’t run his truck into the pedestrian overpass and back up traffic for twelve hours. (5)