Maka’ala Moments #7

Since the girls from Kamehameha are so much more hotter then the mainland, Kimo decided to skip Harvard, and raise mongooses behind Akahi instead. (6)

1. “Since” connotes time passing; “Because” relates to cause and effect.

2. If possible, keep the verb tense consistent. s

3. “more hotter” is redundant; “hotter” is the proper comparative.

4. The adverb “then” should be the conjunction “than.”

5. We have a parallel structure problem; we can’t compare Kamehameha girls to the mainland.

6. No comma is required in a compound infinitive.


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